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Saturday, February 11, 2012

Sweet Saturday Samples: A Snippet From Another WIP ~ JUST SHUT UP and DRIVE

Welcome back to another Sweet Saturday Samples day! I'm glad to see you've found your way to the new home for this popular segment. ;)

Okay, let's get straight to it. A few months ago, I shared a snippet from a short story I wrote called, 'Just Shut Up and Drive'. It was about an eighteen-year young man who was dragged across the country by his 95-year old grandfather. The old man had things he wanted to show his grandson while he still had a chance to. After much 'himming' and 'hawing', I finally decided to expand this story into a novel. I think the concept has true potential and both of these men have life lessons to teach the other (even though they're both too stubborn to admit it!).

I thought I'd give you a taste of how I've started the story and see what y'all think. I have a Prologue to this but I think I'm going to fiddle with that a bit before sharing it. (Perfectionism...it's a curse.) So this is the first couple of pages of Chapter One. It gives you a true 'feel' for the two main characters.

Thirteen years later…
“You want to do what?” eighteen year-old Wil Carter said to his grandfather.
Gramps Wilf clicked his tongue. “I know you aren’t deaf, my boy. I said you and me are going for a road trip for a couple of weeks.”
Wil shook his head picturing being crammed in his puny Ford hatchback with his 95-year old grandfather. For two weeks. Sounded like the start of a really bad cheesy movie: The Adventures of Young Dude and Grumpy Ole Man. Wil could think of more than a fist full of things he’d rather be doing than driving hundreds of miles with a grumpy old man. But he knew there’d be no choice in putting up a fight. He’d end up doing exactly what he always did: What he was told.
It was at the beginning of summer holidays. All Wil wanted to do was work over at the corner drugstore then hang out with his buddies. After all, that was gonna be his last summer in Winnipeg until he headed out West to go to University. But, no. Gramps had set his plan in motion, yet again, without him even knowing.
“Gramps,” Wil said, releasing a sharp breath. “You know that I work at the pharmacy every summer. How am I supposed to earn up my tuition if I’m chauffeuring you around the country? Besides, Mr. Bassey isn’t going to give me that much time off. He’s short staffed and…”
“Already taken care of,” Gramps interrupted, shuffling around his favorite recliner and plopping himself down. “Jim said he could spare ya for the two weeks by getting the other gals to take their holidays later. Done.”
Wil allowed his jaw to fall slack. “Uh…Gramps? Did it ever dawn on you that, maybe, I’d like to…oh, I don’t know… have some fun this summer being that I have to go to University in the fall?”
Gramps flipped the footrest of his recliner up, scootched his body back, folded his hands across his belly, then stared into Wil’s pale blue eyes. “What? You gotta girlfriend?”
“Well, no…”
“Big plans aside from workin’?”
Wil put his hands on his hips then looked up at the ceiling. “No.”
“Doin’ anything special on your days off aside from slackin’ off with those freaky friends of yours at the beach, starin’ at those girls you only wish will be your girlfriends?”
Wil looked back down at his grandfather. “Ouch, Gramps! And, yeah! Hello? I said I wanted to have some fun!”
Gramps grabbed his remote from the armrest. “Mm, hm. Well, ‘fun’ should be spent doin’ things you’re interested in and good at.”
“Well, I’m interested in sitting on the beach and I’m good at looking at girls. C’mon, Gramps! It’s summer. And it’s the last one I have in high school. Some of my friends are moving away to go to school and…”
The old man leaned forward, pointing the remote at Wil, who took that as a cue to shut it. “Let’s get something straight, son. You’re still living under my roof. I know you’re a man now and want to be makin’ all your own choices but there’s still plenty of things you need to learn about life before you’ll make it on your own. And I’m gonna teach you those things this summer. I got some important things I need to show ya. I said we’re goin’ on a road trip and that’s exactly what we’re doing, starting on Monday. Now either sit on down and watch the news with me or find something more exciting to do.”
With that, Gramps pressed the remote with his thumb, and Wil heard the t.v. blaring behind him. The two men glared at each other for a few seconds, then Wil dramatically flopped himself into the green and white checkered barrel chair beside his grandfather’s recliner. He put his elbow on the armrest then leaned his cheek on his fist. From the corner of his eye he saw his grandfather’s mouth tug up into a little smirk.
Wil squinted at the t.v., heat radiating from the nape of his neck. Great, he thought. Two whole weeks of my summer vacation wasted with His Royal Crankiness.
He wondered what his grandfather could possibly have left to teach him. And if he really wanted to know.
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7 comments:

  1. His Royal Crankiness would be a cute title too. I like the concept of the book. I'm glad you decided to expand it.

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    1. Hi Elaine! =D You know...that WOULD be another title option. I kind of like it. I thought it would be a fun one to expand. And I've already thought of a little twist I can add in the middle. ;)

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  2. "You're still living under my roof." LOL. How I love those words! Great idea for a novel.

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    1. hee hee! I know! HOW many times did you hear THAT line while you were growing up? (I heard it alot, actually. LOL!) Thank you!

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  3. This sounds like a really fun story! I only hope the grandfather is a good driver in spite of his age, and not one of those seniors who should've turned in their keys.

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    1. Thanks, Carrie-Anne! =) And don't worry - Gramps isn't allowed to drive anymore. I'll share that in my next snippet. ;)

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  4. I love the interchange between the two men, and like Elaine, I just love 'His Royal Crankiness'.

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